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<shadowm> And please try to be orderly. <_8680_> Of course. <shadowm> e.g. If I see a correction for E2S4 followed by one for E1S8 and another for E2S2 I'll probably flip out.
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- At the end of the day, darkness might claim our homes and lives and trap the world underneath its impenetrable veil. But the night is not eternal, and even amidst chaos, hope shines as a beacon which can help us vanquish our worst fears and reunite us with our destiny.
- Though at the end of the day darkness may claim our homes and lives and trap the world beneath its impenetrable veil, the night is not eternal, and even amidst chaos, hope shines forth as a beacon which can help us vanquish our worst fears and reunite us with our destiny.
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<vultraz> ""We would have killed you on sight, rats, but our master really wanted to see your faces []" <vultraz> I suggest 'really' -> 'greatly' <vultraz> "long after I gave up on my search!" kill 'on' <vultraz> _8680_: agree? <_8680_> Agree. <vultraz> shadowm ^ <_8680_> Shouldn't we wait until we have a good batch of changes to poke OSL? <vultraz> hm... <vultraz> I guess <vultraz> "But, which direction should we go?" remove comma
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<vultraz> "darkness might claim our homes" -> 'darkness may'? "hope shines as a beacon which can help us vanquish" -> 'beacon to help'? <vultraz> _8680_: ^ <vultraz> just notivced this after le tag <_8680_> vultraz: Context? <vultraz> description= _ "At the end of the day, darkness might claim our homes and lives and trap the world underneath its impenetrable veil. But the night is not eternal, and even amidst chaos, hope shines as a beacon which can help us vanquish our worst fears and reunite us with our destiny."+" <_8680_> "might" -> "may", yes. <_8680_> "which can" -> "to"... I don't like it, shadowm may, I don't know. <_8680_> "underneath" -> "beneath" (better flow) <_8680_> Or "underneath" -> "under". <_8680_> "Though at the end of the day darkness may claim our homes and lives and trap the world beneath its impenetrable veil, the night is not eternal, and even amidst chaos, hope shines forth as a beacon which can help us vanquish our worst fears and reunite us with our destiny." <vultraz> still think which can -> to sounds better <_8680_> What is that, someone giving their army a rousing speech? <vultraz> The episode 3 description <vultraz> :P <_8680_> If it was someone orating, I'd rewrite the hope-beacon part, but for that I say it's better as it is. <_8680_> The more I think about "which can" -> "to", the less I like it. <_8680_> If a beacon is "to" anything, it can only be "to" a destination.