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| | ==An Orcish Incursion== | | ==An Orcish Incursion== |
| − | ===1_Defend_the_Forest.cfg===
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| − | *63:59: "shock waves" → "a shock" ("shock wave" wasn't coined until 1907)
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| − | ===4_Valley_of_Trolls.cfg===
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| − | *291:50: two spaces → one space
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| − | ===5_Linaera_the_quick.cfg===
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| − | *24:144: "furtherest" → "furthermost"
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| − | *106:64: "hit and run" → "hit-and-run" (multiple dictionary sources agree there should be use of hyphens; see New Oxford American and [http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/hit-and-run Merriam Websters])
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| − | ===7_Showdown.cfg===
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| − | *111:15: "well defended" → "well-defended" (see note under [http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/well well (adv.)], also consistency with HttT #3 354:158)
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| − | *220:94: "council" → "Council" (the Elvish Council is repeatedly capitalized in previous scenarios as it is a formal entity)
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| | ==Descent into Darkness== | | ==Descent into Darkness== |
| − | ===01_Saving_Parthyn.cfg===
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| − | *19:44: "10" → "ten" (just as 24:305 has "eight" we should be consistent here; 24:37 has "10" but this is referring to an age not a duration)
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| − | *394:53: "The orcs are broken, dead or fled." → "The orcs are broken, dead or have fled" (as it stands, it would be "are dead" and "are fled", but "are fled" doesn't make sense)
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| − | ===02_Peaceful_Valley.cfg===
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| − | *28:32: "Three days travel" → "Three days' travel"
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| − | *28:233: "The necromancer takes pity on Malin in his friendless state, and asks Malin to travel with him." → remove the comma after "state"
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| − | *306:49: "Because it's ridiculous" → "Because it's ridiculous!" (a punctuation mark at the end of the sentence is required)
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| − | ===03_A_Haunting_in_Winter.cfg===
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| − | *33:226: "Elves" → "elves" (consistency)
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| − | ===05_Orc_War.cfg===
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| − | *200:66: "Then, it will be time for you to die again!!!" → remove two exclamation marks (three exclamation marks is grammatically incorrect and unnecessary)
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| − | *316:155: "There is, however, a small favor I will ask of you. That will constitute the last part of your training." → "There is, however, a small favor I will ask of you that will constitute the last part of your training." (combine sentences; the second sentence is actually a fragment)
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| − | ===06_Return_to_Parthyn.cfg===
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| − | *18:230: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| − | *24:97: "you will aid me in retrieving a book.' the necromancer says." → "you will aid me in retrieving a book,' the necromancer says." (this is technically one sentence, thus use a comma not a period)
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| − | *338:359: remove extra white space
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| − | ===08_A_Small_Favor2.cfg===
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| − | *407:56: "passage way" → "passageway"
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| − | ===10_Alone_at_Last.cfg===
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| − | *23:216: "pitch black" → "pitch-black" (see New Oxford American and [http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/pitch-black Merriam Websters])
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| | ==Eastern Invasion== | | ==Eastern Invasion== |
| − | ===01.The_Outpost.cfg===
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| − | *36:42: "king Garard I" → "King Garard I" (title)
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| − | *36:163: "Orcish" → "orcish" (consistency)
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| − | ===02.The_Escape_Tunnel.cfg===
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| − | *168:48: "king of Wesnoth" → "King of Wesnoth" (used as a title in the sentence)
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| − | ===03.An_Unexpected_Appearance.cfg===
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| − | *165:27: Remove two exclamation marks (having three is grammatically incorrect; more than one is unnecessary)
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| − | ===04b.The_Undead_Border_Patrol.cfg===
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| − | *171:40: Remove two exclamation marks (having three is grammatically incorrect; more than one is unnecessary)
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| − | *215:36: Remove two exclamation marks (having three is grammatically incorrect; more than one is unnecessary)
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| − | ===04c.Mal-Ravanals_Capital.cfg===
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| − | *531:46: Too many punctuation marks (use either '!' or '?' or if you must, both, but do not repeat the same punctuation mark as it is unnecessary)
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| − | ===09.Training_The_Ogres.cfg===
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| − | *111:104: "Dacyn, you go north-east. I'll go north-west." → "Dacyn, you go northeast. I'll go northwest." (consistency)
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| − | ===10.Xenophobia.cfg===
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| − | *143:58: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | ===12.Captured.cfg===
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| − | *159:52: "south-west" → "southwest" (consistency)
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| − | *443:108: "south-west" → "southwest" (consistency)
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| − | ===13.Evacuation.cfg===
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| − | *185:127: "including not recalled units" → "including non-recalled units" ("including not" could be confused with "not including" which are not the same)
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| − | *206:125: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | *214:53: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | *274:37: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | ===14.The_Drowned_Plains.cfg===
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| − | *385:29: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | *385:38: Too many punctuation marks
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| − | ===17.Weldyn_Under_Attack.cfg===
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| − | *278:98: "Undead" → "undead" (consistency)
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| − | ===18a.The_Duel.cfg===
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| − | *124:32: "Wait - What just happened?" → "Wait - what just happened?" (same sentence)
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| | ==Heir to the Throne== | | ==Heir to the Throne== |
| − | ===04_The_Bay_of_Pearls.cfg===
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| − | *236:77: "Because we need to control the seas and the merman folk," → "Because we need to control the seas and the merfolk," (a suggestion; since the speaker is an orc, it may have been the author's intention to have him say it awkwardly; however, "merfolk" would be correct to describe both mermen and merwomen)
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| − | *747:31: "north-west" → "northwest" (consistency)
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| − | *749:53: "sea sick" → "seasick" (see New Oxford American and [http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/seasick Merriam Websters])
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| − | ===08_The_Princess_of_Wesnoth.cfg===
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| − | *305:108: "back yard" → "backyard"
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| − | ===09_The_Valley_of_Death.cfg===
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| − | *380:195: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| − | *417:162: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| − | ===10_Gryphon_Mountain.cfg===
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| − | *232:160: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| − | ===13_The_Dwarven_Doors.cfg===
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| − | *Throughout this and scenario 12 are instances of "Dwarven Kingdom[s]", some lower case, some upper. It is hard to distinguish whether they are referring to them as a specific place or just them in general. Some consistency would be good here.)
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| − | *465:44: "north-east" → "northeast" (consistency)
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| − | ===18_A_Choice_Must_Be_Made.cfg===
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| − | *16:232: "pitch black" → "pitch-black" (see New Oxford American and [http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/pitch-black Merrian Websters]
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| − | *209:160: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| − | *283:162: "Merfolk" → "merfolk" (suggestion for consistency; though possible he is referring to a specific army?)
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| − | *293:47: as above (unless "Loyal Merfolk" is intended specifically as a title, though I think not)
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| − | *317:45: Remove question mark (it is grammatically incorrect to use both '!' and '?')
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| − | ===19a_Snow_Plains.cfg===
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| − | *144:37: "Elf" → "elf" (consistency)
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| − | ===19b_Swamp_Of_Dread.cfg===
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| − | *305:91: "shock-wave" → "wave" (or use "shock wave", which is correct spelling; however, shock waves were not vernacular until at least 1907)
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| − | *312:91: same as above
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| − | *321:83: same as above
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| − | ===19c_Cliffs_of_Thoria.cfg===
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| − | *277:146: "Merfolk" → "merfolk" (consistency)
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| − | *318:143: "Orcs" → "orcs" (consistency)
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| − | *318:156: "Undead" → "undead" (consistency)
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| − | *322:126: "Elven" → "elven" (consistency)
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| − | *363:53: "Drakes" → "drakes" (consistency, unless this is part of his title? in which case leader should also be capitalized)
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| − | *379:36: "Drakes" → "drakes" (consistency)
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| − | *563:57: "Drake" → "drake" (consistency)
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| − | *592:57: as above
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| − | *621:57: as above
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| − | *650:57: as above
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| − | *708:57: as above
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| − | *737:57: as above
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| − | *766:57: as above
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| − | *795:57: as above
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| − | *997:42: as above
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| − | *997:115: as above
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| − | *997:126: "Undead" → "undead" (consistency)
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| − | *1159:179: "Gryphons" → "gryphons" (consistency)
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| − | ===20a_North_Elves.cfg===
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| − | *653:78: Remove one exclamation mark (using two is grammatically incorrect and unnecessary)
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| − | ===21_Elven_Council.cfg===
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| − | *100:200: "Elf" → "elf" (consistency, unless it's intended as some kind of bastardization of his title?)
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| − | *128:37: as above
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| − | *156:43: as above
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| − | *192:53: "princess" → "Princess" (title, consistency)
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| − | *255:98: "Elf" → "elf" (consistency, unless as above)
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| − | ===22_Return_to_Wesnoth.cfg===
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| − | *71:180: "Northeastern Wesnoth" → "northeastern Wesnoth" (consistency)
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| | ==Liberty== | | ==Liberty== |
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| − | ===3t_The_Council_Regathers.cfg===
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| − | Line: 145, Col: 25 - Ha! _You_ don't trust _me_? -> Strange way of having emphasis. Perhaps stars (*) would be better? [Lines and Cols done in word so might be slightly off, didn't have time to work it out properly, sorry.]
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| − | :So it might be "Ha! YOU don't trust ME?" —[[User:Ancestral|Ancestral]] 19:09, 13 May 2009 (UTC)
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| | ==Son of the Black Eye== | | ==Son of the Black Eye== |
| − | ===14_Back_Home.cfg===
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| − | *643:43: "You had better go check it out." → "You had better go investigate." (the phrase "check it out" wasn't in vernacular until the 1960s; this is not a phrase anyone in a fantasy period like Wesnoth would ever use; "investigate" is much better, and is starting circa 15th-16th century)
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| | ==The Hammer of Thursagan== | | ==The Hammer of Thursagan== |
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| | ==The Rise of Wesnoth== | | ==The Rise of Wesnoth== |
| − | ===16_Elf_Lords.cfg===
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| − | *481:111: "great river" → "Great River" (place name and consistency)
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| | ==The South Guard== | | ==The South Guard== |